Comments - What time is it? - by Pádraig Ó Tuama
Poetry Unbound
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The day my wife and son go to church
And I stay behind
Although yesterday I spoke something
As I write, I become unraveled
And I stay behind
When I was younger I would draw pictures
As I write, I become unraveled
I couldn’t have known how fast it would go
When I was younger I would draw pictures
And anyway I still draw, well paint
I couldn’t have known how fast it would go
I had a dream that God told me to stop
And anyway I still draw, well paint
Although yesterday I spoke something
I had a dream that God told me to stop
The day my wife and son go to church
Karen Ehrens
May 24
This came together so well, and so deep. Keep painting with color and words.
Michael T Smith
May 24
Thank you, Karen. I will!
Nancy R Heisey
May 24
Writing a pantoum on Sunday has its own rhythms!
Rebecca Stultz
May 24
Don't stop writing, drawing, or painting. The God/Jesus I know wants to see and hear your thoughts and feelings.
Michael T Smith
May 24
Agree, thank you
Lisa Sjostrom
May 24
Please don't stop, no matter what G*d tells you! Very evocative, especially with your wife and son at church and your staying behind... Love this and thank you, Michael.
~Lisa in VT
Michael T Smith
May 24
Thanks Lisa!
Nicola Grove
May 24
me too, none of us knows how fast it will go..ravel yourself back
PAT
May 24
Very thought provoking!!!!!
Michael T Smith
May 24
Thank you
Michael T Smith
May 24
Thank you
- today there is a kind of withdrawing cold that lingers in your fingers around the warm mug of relief
- and I become stuck in an addictive loop of coffee refills and good intentions to write
- although yesterday there was space for sunshine and warmth that caused me to move and undulate
- as I write I feel a contraction of muscle and resistance to the very thing that brings me levity
- when I was younger I rarely resisted the cold and off-putting weather, lunging with galloshes and innocence
Paul Brassard
May 25
Michael, this is so good. You have captured brilliantly, I think, that universal conflict of God, no God. God-fearing family man vs. what? A non-believer? A pantoum for us all.
Michael T Smith
May 25
Wow, thank you for saying that Paul.
Lisa Marie Simmons
May 25
Beautifully done Michael.
Michael T Smith
May 25
Thank you
Dora Odarenko
May 24
I love your last five or six lines! They pull the whole poem together! Dora Odarenko
Michael T Smith
May 25
Thank you Dora